I think your story inspired by the Greek myths is very entertaining. I enjoy how you create the setting and the challenging problem at the beginning. As readers, we know that Hercules is very motivated by his father’s promise. You did a great job of using dialogue here. Hearing Zeus’s voice is very powerful. The reader is engaged in each event by your description. The suspense builds when Hercules “notices something unusual in the distance”. I like how you use capitals to introduce the threatening DARK LORD!. The ending is sensational with your phenomenal description of the Dark Lord and the herculean effort to slay him.
Hello Nathaniel,
I think your story inspired by the Greek myths is very entertaining. I enjoy how you create the setting and the challenging problem at the beginning. As readers, we know that Hercules is very motivated by his father’s promise. You did a great job of using dialogue here. Hearing Zeus’s voice is very powerful. The reader is engaged in each event by your description. The suspense builds when Hercules “notices something unusual in the distance”. I like how you use capitals to introduce the threatening DARK LORD!. The ending is sensational with your phenomenal description of the Dark Lord and the herculean effort to slay him.
Thank you for sharing your story!
Irene
Amazing Nathaniel!Fantastic openers and wow words!