I love your amazing adjectives especially camouflage. I really liked your opener finally it really made your writing stand out and it also makes people want to read more of your fabulous writing! Your writing was so amazing I don’t think there was anything wrong with it! You have put all your effort into your writing keep up the good work!
Thank’s for mentioning me!!!
I liked the way you said about your best friends. From Ella
I love your amazing adjectives especially camouflage. I really liked your opener finally it really made your writing stand out and it also makes people want to read more of your fabulous writing! Your writing was so amazing I don’t think there was anything wrong with it! You have put all your effort into your writing keep up the good work!
I like your story and your carrycot . I like how you had different friends and you ended in the summer holiday .
I love your story! I can see a few capital letters missing.