Loved it! I noticed a short mistake though, how did Daniel sneak into your fortress if it was invisible?
Did he have super vision?
How did he break in?
I loved the way you used all of your friends
You used really good connectives
Brilliant vocabulary
And good punctuation.
The sentence I really liked was this one: Carefully me, Thomas and Emily v surrounded Daniel, catching him with a web ice metal forcefield
I also liked the way you used to be continued..
I can’t believe you made this story Joseph! How did you come up with it. How many parts are you going to make Joseph?
Your story was amazing! I really like all your elf story’s are all so exciting! Keep it up.
I like how you put your friends in and you have these cool powers!!
It is not made up, it is real.
Loved it! I noticed a short mistake though, how did Daniel sneak into your fortress if it was invisible?
Did he have super vision?
How did he break in?
I loved the way you used all of your friends
You used really good connectives
Brilliant vocabulary
And good punctuation.
The sentence I really liked was this one: Carefully me, Thomas and Emily v surrounded Daniel, catching him with a web ice metal forcefield
I also liked the way you used to be continued..
WOW Joseph! Only a paragraph and yet so detailed! I LOVE the way you used so many adjectives!