Hello, Ella!
I really liked your story! I thought your story was very exiting, which turned from a peaceful story to a story which you can’t put down! my only criticism is that before you submit a story, you might want to check your spellings, and add in some punctuation! Other than that, well done for a great story!
nice story I liked it
next time add more sentences but great work by the way
Thanks for the first coment I have had on this story
Good vocabulary ? Like the story that fruit sounds delicious ?
Hello, Ella!
I really liked your story! I thought your story was very exiting, which turned from a peaceful story to a story which you can’t put down! my only criticism is that before you submit a story, you might want to check your spellings, and add in some punctuation! Other than that, well done for a great story!