I was excited to see that your adventure included a trip to America. I thought maybe you were talking about the U.S., but we don’t have wild monkeys here. You have some strong verbs in your story, but it seems like there might be more than one storyline? Also, remember to include full stops when your sentences get too long. That will help your reader to better understand your writing. You have a great imagination! Keep writing 🙂
I was excited to see that your adventure included a trip to America. I thought maybe you were talking about the U.S., but we don’t have wild monkeys here. You have some strong verbs in your story, but it seems like there might be more than one storyline? Also, remember to include full stops when your sentences get too long. That will help your reader to better understand your writing. You have a great imagination! Keep writing 🙂